Friday, May 27, 2016

Rewrite After Story Meeting Sat. 052816 15:40 PDT

PAGE ONE

TIMESTAMP: A planet called "Aerth".

TIMESTAMP: A... different Earth.

TIMESTAMP: China.

TIMESTAMP: 1870.

TIMESTAMP: Twenty minutes ago.

V: Hahaha! A full century!

V: If my old cohorts could see me now!

V: A wizened sage...

V: Master of the craft...

V: Guardian of lost secrets...

V: Oh, Elizabeth...

V: How dare they call me a failure?

PAGE TWO

TIMESTAMP: Aerth.

TIMESTAMP: The South Seas.

TIMESTAMP: 1870.

TIMESTAMP: Just Last Week.

EN: Emperors and sultans. Ministers and tycoons.

EN: How they covet my secrets, to the world's ruination!


EN: And you want me to meet with this... fool?


PAGE THREE

EN: Frankly, I question your loyalty.

EN: Speak quickly. You may save your life.

BD: This Victor Frankenstein. He's found a way.

BD: He can combine them both. With a host.

EN: And...?

BD: I think he can do it. Bypass your "Pathways".

EN: Then Victor Frankenstein must die!

PAGE FOUR

TIMESTAMP: Aerth's Moon.

TIMESTAMP: City of the Moonfolk

TIMESTAMP: 1870.

TIMESTAMP: Only Yesterday.

AQ: How many came through?

YI: We know of two, so far.

DS: Have they contacted anyone else?

AQ: We must secure both prototypes.

YI: They have contacted someone. Victor Frankenstein.

DS: Surely this can't be allowed?

AQ: Bring us these two. Kill Victor Frankenstein.

PAGE FIVE.1a/b thru .5a/b

TIMESTAMP: "Our" Earth.

TIMESTAMP: 1970.

TIMESTAMP: China.

TIMESTAMP: One hundred years in the future.

TIMESTAMP: A universe away...

Five.1a/b (briefcase moment)

BD: They wanted us to steal it. (Organism)

WS: We worked together, as usual. (Mechanism)

Five.2a/b (BD in Suit, Kestrel tinkers with Organism/Mechanism, WS with Conveyance)

BD: And, as usual, to study it. (Organism)

WS: We reverse-engineered it. (Mechanism)

Five.3a/b (spaceport bar? hotel pool? Penelope Shaw looks on)

BD: They said it had "endless possibilities." (Organism)

WS: They warned of "grave repercussions." (Mechanism)

Five.4 (the hot kiss)

BD: But I had my own ideas. (hot embrace, Penelope Shaw looks on)

WS; I'll admit it, I let it get personal. (hot embrace, Penelope Shaw looks on)

Five.5 (BD, Suit, Organism, Kestrel, Remote, Mechanism, Conveyance, WS)

BD/WS: What were we thinking? What were we thinking? (Organism and Mechanism)

PAGE FIVE.6a & b

TIMESTAMP: Aerth.

TIMESTAMP: China.

TIMESTAMP: 1870.

TIMESTAMP: Just Last Month.

Western Spy 1870 and Mechanism with Victor

WS: It was... dying?

WS: I thought he could fix it.

WS: Another mistake.

V: Now, now. Victor won't hurt you!

Bamboo Dancer 1870 and Organism with Victor

BD: The poor thing.

BD: I didn't realize how sick he was.

BD: What could I do?

V: Stop wiggling! Just a little piece!

PAGE SIX

TIMESTAMP: Aerth.

TIMESTAMP: China.

TIMESTAMP; 1870.

TIMESTAMP: Fifteen minutes ago.

panel 1 - silhouette with skull

V: They all doubted me, Elizabeth. Even you.

panel 2 - toss

V: You're dead to me, now.

panel 3 - monster gulps skull

V: I'm married to my work.

Ziz: GULP!

PAGE SEVEN

V: I love my work.

PAGES EIGHT, NINE, TEN

TIMESTAMP: Aerth.

TIMESTAMP: China.

TIMESTAMP; 1870.

Nearby, not far away, just over that hill.

Ten, nine, eight minutes ago.

SEE SCRIPT

PAGE ELEVEN

Silver Arm is bounding off toward the action.

Golden Lion (facing reader?): This is peaceful?

PAGE TWELVE

TIMESTAMP: Aerth.

TIMESTAMP: China.

TIMESTAMP; 1870.

TIMESTAMP: Now.

panel 1

A: It has been a long journey, Victor.

A: Correcting your mistakes. Erasing them. Righting your very numerous wrongs.

A: But I'm here now.

panel 2

V: Are you an old assistant, bent on revenge? One of my creations? Lover of some slighted maiden?

panel 3

A: I brought you a birthday present, Victor.

panel 4

A: We should have a chat.

panel 5

A: I'd absolutely kill for a cup of tea.

panel 6

V: My birthday? How would you know about...?

panel 7

A: We share a birthday, Victor.

panel 8

A: After all. I'm you. Only so  much better.

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